During the past nine months of blogging I have had many kind requests for me to feature more of my writing. Today I am very pleased to post my first winning story, which was printed in Writing Magazine last year. As it is quite long, I have chosen to split this into two parts with the concluding part appearing tomorrow. Enjoy and I look forward to your comments.
BIDING HER TIME
Aged seven Queenie fell in love for the first time. The only time. From the moment she saw Thomas, she knew that here was her future husband. He just didn’t know it yet.
It was the first day of school and Queenie spotted Thomas at the front. Straight backed, tall, skinny, he sat next to the teacher’s desk. His blond hair was cut short military-style. The worn out trousers were a hand-me-down and the navy blue fisherman jumper had been repaired at the elbows. Nervously he fingered the black slate, then the chalk, before rubbing his dusty fingers across his trousers, leaving a white smiling streak grinning for the rest of the day.
Carefully Queenie edged past the other desks but felt a slight tug on her new skirt; it had caught on a wood splitter from one of the desks and sighing, she gently released the skirt and realised she could easily mend it later at home.
Tentatively she opened the lid of her desk, then, as she twisted to listen to her friend, it slammed shut. The classroom fell silent and all eleven pairs of eyes were on her. Even his. Thomas’s. She smiled sweetly, shaking her head, the long pigtails waving apologetically to the teacher, the red bows catching the sunlight.
“Well, Queenie,” said the teacher. “Thank you for that, but please in the future leave it to me to settle the class. To work…”
The rest of the day passed in a blur as Queenie hugged her secret to herself and there it remained for the weeks, months and years ahead.
The infamous tales of Thomas and Queenie quickly spread across the small fishing island as the academic pupils rivalled for first place in every subject. Their nine fellow school friends awaited each test result with anticipation, as first one week Thomas excelled in maths, the following week Queenie produced a stunning essay.
One day as the sunlight streamed in through the windows, Thomas’s arm flew up in answer to the teacher’s latest maths question.
“Yes, Thomas. Please answer. Let’s see your ability to predict the future,” said the teacher with a quizzical smile. “Or shall I finish the question first? Eagerness is all well and good, but do be patient.”
Shamefaced Thomas remained silent for the rest of the day and he waited for Queenie to outshine him. She didn’t however, and stayed mute herself, feeling for him and his embarrassment.
Through the years the pair struck up a lively banter, but it was just that, banter. Yet Queenie knew. She felt her love flourish as Thomas grew into a young man; strong and broad now, regularly working on the boats, helping to bait the longlines at five in the morning before school.
With frost on his overcoat and hat he scrambled late into class and was allowed a minute to put the coat by the fire and to thaw his numb hands. He added his coarse grey woollen mittens to the rows already hanging on the wooden railings. Water dripped from them all and formed small pools below. A warm fug penetrated the classroom and by lunchtime the now only slightly damp mittens were retrieved, hats donned and coats buttoned up as they headed out again.
“Queenie! Wait!” called Thomas one day at home time. They were thirteen, she older by a month and therefore the boss – or so they joked.
“Queenie!”
She stopped, as did her heart for a second. The sun hung low in the sky, the sea mist coasting up the cliffs and across the playground, lapping at their feet.
“Here. Borrow my gloves. I saw yours still sopping wet from lunchtime. Mine are dry.” Gratefully she accepted and as she lent to pick up her books, Thomas, with his long arms, reached over and took them.
“Let me. I’ll walk you home.”
Anxiously he talked about the fishing, the latest herring prices and his uncle’s new trawler. Queenie smiled, her long brown hair tucked under her fur hat, the brown coat sweeping the ground. She could bide her time. Already a head taller than her, Queenie glanced up at Thomas, his blond hair darkening to a soft longer brown, a cap perched on his head. Yes, I can wait, she thought.
A few months later Queenie quietly let herself into the classroom, her eyes red and downcast. She raised her head only once, to look at Thomas’s desk, now unoccupied.
Her friends approached cautiously, as if trying to rescue an injured and frightened bird.
“We’re so sorry to hear about Thomas’s father,” uttered one friend.
“They say it was quick,” another tried to reassure. “Heart attack, wasn’t it?”
“How is Thomas? When is he coming back?”
Queenie just shook her head, unable to answer, her summer coat clasped tightly around her.
“Class, please settle.” Even the teacher was subdued. “We are all so sorry to hear about the loss in Thomas’s family. As some of you may know, he will not be returning to school…”
“What?!” The uproar was controlled but loud. Shocked chatter reverberated around the room.
End of part one…To read the concluding part, please click here.
© Annika Perry
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A cliffhanger… got to go right now and read the second installment!
Ha! That’s the advantage of reading this a day or two later..you don’t have to wait too long after the cliffhanger. Only a click or two and you’re there! Thank you so much for your comment.
Looking forward to part two!
You don’t have to wait! I have just post it. Enjoy.
I read it and enjoyed it very much!
Looking forward to reading the next part.
Thank you Andrew.
Congrats, Annika! I eagerly await the next installment.
Thank you, Jacqui. 😀 Luckily not long to wait…
What? Where’s the rest? I have to wait?
Great story, Annika. I love the details that you paint into the world of the story. Looking forward to the next installment!
I am so sorry Diana for keeping you waiting! I was worried about scaring everyone off when wordpress kindly announces 1600+ words left to read. Thank you so much for your kind comment – writing is like that I feel – painting away with words. When it works the feeling is euphoric.
A wise choice Annika. I see the word count on some posts and get a little gun shy. This was perfect.
Diana, thank you and glad you think so.
Well, that’s what I call a cliff-hanger!
Just hang on there! Glad you like the cliff-hanger. Luckily it also fell half-way in the story. I hadn’t planned that at all when writing it.
I remember this story from your assignment and of course, I bought the magazine. It’s great to see it again. It’s brilliant.
Thank yo so much Esther. I still have your original comment when you said that was a winner! At the time I thought how sweet and encouraging of you to say so, then couldn’t believe it when I heard I’d won.
You are very talented, Annika, and this proves I know talent when I see it 😉
No wonder this won! The whole story is wonderful and beautifully crafted.
The charachters are painted with swift and strong sentences; how can one not fall in love
with young Queenie and feel tenderly for Thomas. Even the teacher’s character is clear in your two revealing sentences directed to Queenie and Thomas.
Annika, you must let Queenie’s faith in “biding her time” come true.
I will be waiting for the second part tomorrow – with eagerness.
Thank you so Mirja for your warm words, I’m deeply touched. This was one of those stories that wrote itself once I had thought of the first sentence. A magical feeling. I feel keenly for Queenie’s and her early wisdom. The ending could go two ways…not long until you’ll find out… 😀
Congratulations on having your story published, Annika. I enjoyed the first installment and I’ll look forward to the conclusion.
Thank you so much Jill. Glad you liked the first part and I’m sure you’ll enjoy the final tomorrow.